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all I could see is only you,
'Cause when it rains I remember you.
I can feel you when the droplets touch me
and find you standing close to me,
drenched in the memories of time spent with you
'cause when it rains I remember you.
Laying on the ground, I look at the sky
I see you there so innocent, so shy,
in the clouds I try to figure out you
'cause when it rains I remember you.
Dear Prajwala,
"cause when it rains i remember you!"
Candid,simple and romantic!
What more can i say?
Girl,Guess the sleep during one whole month has made all the wonders!
Miles to go :)
Take care!
cheerio:)
A
Dear Prajwala,
"cause when it rains,i remember you!"
Candid,simple and romantic!
"Drenched in the memories of time i spent i spent with you"
Beautiful imagery!
And rain eternally is the "benchmark" for romantic poetry!
You have well made use of that!
Way to go!
take care:)
cheerio:)
A
"cause when it rains, i remember you!"...
After"Shall I compare thee to a summer's day"...
this is the only poem that made me hear the romantic beast inside me roar...
Brilliant piece of work...
Plz, do add some more stanzas & Keep writing...
-RChX
PS:- I will use it in my propose lines.
now now...apart from being romantic i cant help but see it from a "dennis the menace"point of view[:P]
what if it hardly rains at ur place?
that would speak a lot for how much u remember that some one[:D]LOL...
Sorry but am used to seeing things the cyrus way...but yes this was a really good one and a wee reminder to myself that i still have a long way to go b4 i can play with words the way u do.
and yes, as some one in the comments above or below said I to shall use these lines if i ever propose or if i have to patao my girl[;)] and if it clicks well...i owe u !!
cheers!
PS: selling copyrights to ur work?
lemme know[;)]
@ Archana
Thanks a ton dear! :) well just tried to make the perfect use of the "benchmark" of love... 'the rain'... glad to know that somehow succeeded in it! :)
@Romil
well for you I'm short of words... though there are a very few occasions which make me speechless... this is one of those... your comment watered my eyes... this is a big encouragement for a beginner like me... will try to add a few more stanzas...
(in answer to your P.S) sure you can use it in your propose lines... but please don't forget to revel the truth that these are my lines! ;)
@Rohit
well rain is one point of time... and not the only point of time ;) when that 'some one' is remembered :)
thanks for saying these words for me... even I still have miles to go!
as I asked him... even you can use these lines... but please revel the truth! and don't fool her :D
(reply to P.S)you said if it clicks you owe to me... that's all I demand as a royalty... nothing else! :)
short and sweet
"Wordsworth" community on Orkut carries me to this beautiful blog page. I've read almost all the posts and love its contents.
Coming to this specific piece of poetic contribution, I must frankly admit that it whispers something to me. Alike may not its author have wished to say. But, it is true to all literary contributions and it's quite relevant how an individual mind of a reader beholds of and responds to it. Simply, I love to share it.
Firstly, it has an excellent flow. Although it is quite short in length it does not lose its breezy sequence abruptly.
Secondly, it conveys me more of a revealing sense of severence with the innerself than of a romance in reminiscing a joyous togethernees of the past. The reflection is more of pains in identifying ownself than in losing it. I love to hear in that way and I'm satiated to hear in that way.
Let more of it flourish in time to come.
My best wishes,
@ Paras
Thanks :)
@Saibal Barman
firstly, thanks for calling it a beautiful page... 'cause I'm just a beginner...
secondly, glad to read what you felt after reading it...
lets hope that I do flourish as time passes! :)
Its so Romantic
hellooo.....woww....I simply loved the last four linesss....they were honestly awesome....when I read those four lines....I was likee....wow....I shud let my frnds know of this poem....
I took out a pen and paper...noted down those four lines.....
now I'm gonna show them those lines tomorrow....
keep writing.....you're simply top class......
A lovely poem, as was the story above it.
My best to you and your blog.
loved the last lines !!! so cute :)
@MasratQadri, aragorn & Pratz
thanku :)
@Shawn Michel de Montaigne & Pretty Me!!
thanks :)